Today we are going to write an ACTION PARAGRAPH!
STONE AGE BOY - Hunt a Reindeer
THE SWEET SHOP GRANDPA - A giant begins to destroy Candy Cane Forest
The sections in blue show extra detail that I have added to my story to describe new characters and the action taking place.
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Suddenly a boy ran up, shouting and pointing to the
hills. At once
several
people grabbed their spears and followed him. Om and I
followed them.
Slowly, slowly, we crept forwards until we saw – a
reindeer! It was standing
alone, munching the grass.
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Suddenly a small child ran up, crying and rubbing his tummy. At
once, the blue creatures surrounded
the wailing boy, “There’s a
Blerghuch
down by the river and it is destroying Candy Cane Forest!”
The blue creatures grabbed a huge
strawberry net and followed the
child to the river. The old man and Chaz
followed them. Quickly,
quickly they darted forwards until they saw… the
Blerghuch. The old
man had never seen anything like it! As wide as a building and as
tall as the sky, the
Blerghuch was a giant. It stood tall, eclipsing the
light of the sun and plunging the Candy Kingdom into darkness. On
the
ground, it’s feet were the size of double
beds and the ground shook as they
rose and slammed to the earth,
crushing the Candy Cane Forest to a dusting of sherbet!
