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KEEP GOING! THE STORIES YOU HAVE SENT ARE LOOKING AMAZING! Think how good it is going to feel when you have written a full story! 😃
FOR EXAMPLE: BLACK - original story. GREEN - Miss Robinson's new story
Remember to send them through to year3@hilltop.doncaster.sch.uk
The parts highlighted in yellow are the parts that I have changed.
STONE AGE BOY
THE SWEET SHOP GRANDPA
The next morning, Om showed me round the camp.
Everyone seemed
busy and had
a job to do. Over the next few days, I saw so much
I’d never seen before. Om’s people had no knives and forks, no
plastic,
no metal even. Everything they had was made from wood,
stone, animal skins or bones.
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The next morning, Chaz gave the old man a tour around the Candy
Kingdom.
All of the creatures that he saw seemed busy having
amazing adventures and fun in this magical, new
world. Over the
next few days, he saw miraculous things that he had never seen
before. Chaz’s people had no vegetables, no fruit or any
normal
foods! Everything they had was made from sweets, candy, chocolate
and gummies!
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One afternoon we went to the river. The little ones picked berries
and nuts, but Om and I watched the men fishing. They held their
pointed spears high and stood as still as trees. Then
suddenly,
swoosh! Their spears
dropped down like lightning and came up again
spiking wriggling silver fish.
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Late one
day, they went to the chocolate truffle river. The smallest
of the creatures plucked gum drops from the
lollipop trees but Chaz
and the old man watched the more experienced creatures catching
butter(scotch)flies
in nets made of strawberry laces. They held their
strawberry nets high and
silent in the air as they stood
as still as
frozen popsicles. The suddenly, swoosh! Their nets dropped down and
were quickly filled with dozens of fluttering,
toffee-coloured insects.
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