Tuesday, 7 July 2020

English Part 4 - ACTION!


Today we are going to write an ACTION PARAGRAPH! 

STONE AGE BOY - Hunt a Reindeer

THE SWEET SHOP GRANDPA - A giant begins to destroy Candy Cane Forest

The sections in blue show extra detail that I have added to my story to describe new characters and the action taking place. 

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Suddenly a boy ran up, shouting and pointing to the hills. At once 

several people grabbed their spears and followed him. Om and I 

followed them. Slowly, slowly, we crept forwards until we saw – a 

reindeer! It was standing alone, munching the grass.
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Suddenly a small child ran up, crying and rubbing his tummy. At 

once, the blue creatures surrounded the wailing boy, “There’s a 

Blerghuch down by the river and it is destroying Candy Cane Forest!” 

The blue creatures grabbed a huge strawberry net and followed the 

child to the river. The old man and Chaz followed them. Quickly, 

quickly they darted forwards until they saw… the Blerghuch. The old 

man had never seen anything like it! As wide as a building and as 

tall as the sky, the Blerghuch was a giant. It stood tall, eclipsing the 

light of the sun and plunging the Candy Kingdom into darkness. On 

the ground, it’s feet were the size of double 

beds and the ground shook as they rose and slammed to the earth, 

crushing the Candy Cane Forest to a dusting of sherbet!

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